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fiddlestick) wrote2018-11-26 08:16 pm
fiddlestick) wrote2018-11-26 08:16 pm
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What'd you do
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I’ve been trying to write a song to sing for Elliot’s birthday since last year, I’m running out of time and it’s still shit-way done
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That's a really sweet gesture and all and I really do wish you the best, but at least as far as it comes to me, I think you might be looking at the wrong person for help here
I have nothing in terms of musical ability
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Hear the guy out first!
[and then, towards Eren:]
So what part's got you hung up? Lyrics? Beat? Instruments?
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Thanks Crow. Both of you.
[ and now— for the main attraction. ]
It’s going to be acoustic guitar. I got the melody but it could use some tweaking. Lyrics are the worst part. I started a year ago and still can’t get it right.
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No, I'm serious. I spent a good chunk of time trying to pick up guitar when I was younger and at my best I think the best I could have given you was a really shitty version of Wonderwall
But lyrics, huh? I still don't know on that, I'm no poet or anything, but I can at least give feedback... what have you got?
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I've been looking over Elliot's music for the past semester so I've got an eye for what works and what doesn't...vaguely
I can help out in that area
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Alright
[ and send: a video of him sitting on a chair playing something (pretend it’s actually his song) similar to this. it’s poetic af and closer to the chorus he has to stop, stare somewhere into the void and mutter fuck relentlessly.
you know it’s chorus time when the playing tunes off and he
just looks frustrated :( he can only, in the end, muster a in this world— i’m just tangled up in you. ]
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but hm. Okay. He's not doing too badly, he's just missing the chorus... which, admittedly, is the most important part, but.]
Okay, okay. Solid start
So basically we just need something to finish that first line up, something that rhymes with you
And let's just stop Crow before he immediately hones in on "screw"... "true," maybe?
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Guilty as charged
[He's not even trying to deny that claim, which is amazing in itself.]
"True" could work. It's got a strong, confident vibe to it.
You're entering a whole new life together, after all, so maybe work off that? Reach from your heart and say whatever you feel. We can always trim it down later
They call that brainstorming
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you’re what i know is true
here i am always tangled
tangled up in you
It sounds so bland
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Hm, maybe a little, although I think it's sweet...
Well. The whole thing kind of has a bit of a negativity to it anyway, doesn't it? That he's the light in the darkness
So maybe instead of "you're what I know is," "where nothing else is?"
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Well it's not Dinosaur Laser Fights, it's a love song
Rean's got the right idea, though, try spicing up your words by swapping out a few. You've got a good foundation, at least
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[ a minute isn’t actually a minute— more like an hour; but at least the next time he sends a voice clip of the chorus rewritten and sung, it’s better.
he’s got the voice of a screamer and there are moments it looks like he want to YELL, but!! he’s surprisingly gentle!! ]
I don’t want it to sound too negative, though. Just real.
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I'm not saying doom and gloom anyway, just. Kinda keeping with the tone. I like this though
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Yeah, this is definitely more -you-. Genuine I guess you could say. And that's something Elliot's gonna love about it
Just make sure you're keeping your words to the beat. It'll come naturally once you practice a few times
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You both saved my ass. Thanks.
And there was Rean saying he couldn’t help, bullshit.
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Still, I'm glad I helped out. Let us know how it goes over, okay?
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Heh, my pleasure. You didn't even really need us--you had all the ingredients, you just had to fine tune em
Literally
[But he won't pass up this chance to tease Rean-]
Rean's always the first to discount himself. He's a man of many talents